Monday, 17 January 2011

Lunar's Tears: Chapter 2

Chapter 2


"Are you okay?" I heard a girl ask.
     "Of course she's OK. I only did medium-power," another voice said. Too many voices. I just needed quiet...
     "Well, she's only a mortal."
     A groan escaped my mouth. My eyes rolled inside my eye sockets. A pounding on my head took away all my focus. "I think she hit her head when she fainted." Fainted? Hit my head...? Were they even talking about me? "Can you hear me?" She asked. So many questions...
     "Since when did you become a doctor?" The other voice whispered.
"Sshhhh," I hushed them, lazily. I groaned again, and slowly opened my eyes. My vision was blurry, and I could just make out the shapes of two people, one crouching over me, the other standing. Eventually, the blurriness cleared. And the sight of them again had me shuddering.
      "Are you OK?" The girl, the one closest to me, asked again. All I could think about was the sword inside her coat...
      "I told you she was alright," he said to the girl. "I'm Thor, by the way." He turned to me.
      "I have a mouth," I mumbled through my confusion. Thor's eyes rolled up and down, as if he was... Appraising me.
      Then, he chuckled. "I like 'em with attitude."
"You like 'em any way," the girl spoke.
     "True," he said, laying a hand on her arm. 
She shook him off. "My name's Kallista. I'm sorry about that," Kallista said, nodding to the road, "some of us don't know when to stop," she glared up at Thor.
     Hesitantly, I looked over at the road. The car had gone. I thought I could make out the heap of melted metal in a corner. But the street was destroyed. That could have been any one's car. The flames must have swallowed up the street, and spat it back out. The middle of the road were just... Burned. I couldn't think of any other way to describe it. The light grey tarmac was now a charcoal black. Where I had once been standing had crumpled to a pile of brick. And it came upon me that they'd moved me to the other side of the road.
     Thor chuckled, "I told you-"
"I know," Kallista said sharply, glancing at me. They seemed so... Calm. Like this was an everyday thing.
"We may need to contact Scrutinous," Kallista said.
      "Relax, Kallista," Thor replied, finally seeming a tad concerned and on edge. "Nothing happened."
     And destroying the street is nothing?" I asked. What were these people going to do? I was still so dizzy...
     "See?" Kallista loud-whispered.
"What do you think happened?" Thor stared at me intensely, waiting for my answer.
     "You... You... The car..." I struggled for the words.
"She doesn't know anything," Thor murmured. Then, in a louder voice he declared, "Well, Kallista and I must be going. It was nice meeting you..." He waited for me to give him my name. I didn't. "... Miss," he finished, "but duty calls."
     "And best to leave before Dragona finds this," Kallista added. She jumped up, and dusted her jeans. Were they just... leaving so abruptly?
     "Agreed," Thor said.
Thor linked arms with Kallista, turned around, and-
      There was another man there. He looked about twenty, and must have been 6ft 4. His hair only added to his height, with it spiking off in all directions. My neck hurt from staring up at him.
"What's happening here?" He spoke in a clear, deep voice.
      "Dang it, Dragona," Thor said under his breath.


So, which format do you like more? Gaps or no gaps?

8 comments:

  1. LOL AWESOMESAUSE!!!!!
    WOOT!!!! I LOVE IT! How could you say not to read it?
    You are a BRILLIANT writer! I loved the diolog! LOL
    i can't wait to read more! Must have MOAR!!!!
    XDDD

    BRAVO!!!!

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  2. Awesome Lunar, I prefer it now than with gaps! I love my entrance :D

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  3. LUNAR!!! YOU ROCK!!!!
    This is truly an epic of epic, epic-ness.
    I love the way you write as me!
    Its spooky how much my dialouge sounds like me!
    I was especially impressed with how well u did my conversations with Kallista. It really did sound like the way we talk!
    EPIC!!!!!

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  4. There is only one small error in this chapter.
    When i put my hand on Kallista's arm, she shakes me off.

    Lunar, Kallista NEVER shakes me off ;) lol

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  5. Wow. I'll propably have to read all of them... ^^

    I still prefer gaps.
    *starts to erase Dragonas comment about how he prefers it without gaps*

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  6. HOW DO I STOP THE MUSIC! *screams* AAGRRRGHHHHH!!!



    EPICA WRITING! I read the first paragraph, and was hooked. Great work!

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  7. cooooooooooooooooooooooooooolllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll amazingggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
    wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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